Friday, February 10, 2017

Make a replacement poem

Peasant Wedding by William Carlos Williams

Pour the wine bridegroom
where before you the
bride is enthroned her hair

loose at her temples a head
of ripe wheat is on
the wall beside her the

guests seated at long tables
the bagpipers are ready
there is a hound under

the table the bearded Mayor
is present women in their
starched headgear are

gabbing all but the bride
hands folded in her
lap is awkwardly silent simple

dishes are being served
clabber and what not
from a trestle made of an

unhinged barn door by two
helpers one in a red
coat a spoon in his hatband

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Drizzle the cream Londoner
when after she the
enchantress was enraptured his hands

tight at her waist a twinge
by rich perfume was upon
the bedsheets beyond him the

gardens flushed by pearlescent moons
the pillows are lonely
here was a cup above

the nightstand the lush coffeemaker
was hollow boy in his
luxurious skin is

lacking fully yet the enchantress
hips collapsed in his
legs by easily fierce complex

drinks are belonging finished
beers and coffees
against a mind taken of an

touched silk heart from one
lipsticks two on a pink
lip a branch on her horizon

I arrived at this poem simply by following through with my first thought at starting at the first line.  I just kind of let it flow from there and tried to keep the over idea of the poem consistent.  It was random at first but once I wrote out that first line I saw an image in my head of what I wanted the poem to create so I did my best to describe that feeling that I felt.  It was also actually much more difficult than I anticipated.  I didn't expect it to be easy by any means, especially with the way I write, but I think it just ultimately showed me that I need to work on my grasp of figures of speech.  It also might have been a touch more difficult because I didn't want it to just be random, even though I do love random and abstract writing as well.  Today I just wanted a clear vibe to create the picture I was seeing/feeling in my mind.

1 comment:

  1. The new poem changes a lot even in the first line in place and content, from wine to cream for a spot of tea, I'm assuming. The funny thing here is that the grammar part seems like its own sort of poem.

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