Rhetorical Figures 1

buzz, slap, bang, clatter, mumble, meow, clink, drizzle, splash, flutter, clap, thump, swish, gasp, swing, whip, zap, twist

(I am Waiting)

I am drizzle

to slap some imitations

of buzz

by recollecting my gasp childhood

mumble I am waiting

for the meow mornings to come again

for some flutter of unpremeditated art

to swing my typewriter

and I am waiting to twist

the great whip poem

and I am mumble

for the last long clink

and I am perpetually zap

for the fleeting lovers on the Grecian splash

to catch each bang at last

and clatter

and I thump awaiting 

perpetually clap forever

a swish of wonder

Diction

No one can see me, no one would stop me, no one could help me.  They would just call the adults but it would be too late.  My only regret is waiting.  She'd have the coffee on.  There was a time during my search for a cure when I tried everything to stop including giving up communication.  The smell filled the room.  I loved to drink a pint of beer in the evening, to say I missed you to my ex after we'd spent another night together.  I'd tell her now it's going okay except for the poison.  It's going okay except for how much I miss her and think about her.  How?  Why?  I've never been a very good girlfriend.

No one can see me, no one would stop me, no one could help me.  They would just call the children but it would be too late.  My only regret is acting too quickly.  She'd have the coffee on.  There was a time during my search for a cure when I tried everything to stop including giving up the distance.  The smell filled the air outside.  I loved to drink a glass of water in the afternoon, to say I hadn't thought of him to my boyfriend after we'd spent another day together.  I'd tell her now it's going okay escape for the poison.  It's going okay except for how much I miss her and she never crosses my mind.  When?  Who?  I've never been a very good ex girlfriend.

The tone definitely changed the second time around and was far less somber and depressing.  Switching around the words also changed the meaning as well.  First of all, I think it's most obvious that the paragraph doesn't make complete sense in either of the examples because of the pronouns, i.e. me thinking of a him while filling in the blanks and the author using a her.  The first time around did make more sense and one could piece together my overall tone behind it, but the meaning got a bit lost when I had to switch to opposite words.  I for one prefer when things are a bit more longing and gloomy, so I tried to give it that tone originally.

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Dead of Winter
Achilles Heel
An Open Book
Drunk as a Skunk
Back From the Dead
Alls Well That Ends Well
Cat Nap
Puppy Love
Cool as a Cucumber
Knock it Out of The Park
Heat of the Moment
Once in a Blue Moon

Back From the Winter
Dead of the Dead
Drunk as a Book
Open as a Skunk
Puppy Nap
Cat Love
Cool Out of the Park
Knock it out of the Cucumber
Heat of the Blue Moon
Once in a Moment

Once in a Blue Moon...Literally whatever is happening wouldn't happen because I've never seen a blue moon.  Unless you wanted to do said thing once whilst inside a bottle of Blue Moon beer.

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